she lives behind that door.
left all alone,
like that water on shore,
when the waves return.
she could sing to you,
of histories buried under stone,
of seas that turned to sand,
that sand which someone held,
and kept near for ages,
But as the hour glass broke,
it slipped to cover her
from bottom to head.
she could whisper to you
of a ship where an ocean sank,
of lost sailors that
found a place where
the city never saw a land;
where,
strangers built houses,
from deck of cards,
black and red.
Black
like that hole in a broken branch
left as smoke that was never white.
red
as the color of that stain on her lips,
left as footsteps
of those strangers who built those
houses in every corner in her,
she gave.
she lives behind that door.
left all alone,
she could have answered
But no one knocks her any more.
... wow ... that's beautiful ... the din of silent sadness and isolation is deafening ... what an amazing whisper of a verse ... it consumes and is consuming ... "like that water on shore" ... "when the waves return" ... is a haunting image ... "she could sing to you" ... "of histories buried under stone" ... for me ... is a metaphor for all that she knows and all that she can regale you with ... "of seas that turned to sand" ... magical alliteration ... but it's really this image that is breathtakingly beautiful and yet so poignant ... "but as the hour glass broke" ... "it slipped to cover her" ... "from bottom to head" ... this is just so graphic and striking ... unforgettable ... "of a ship where an ocean sank" ... a sinking ocean ... wow ... "strangers built houses" ... "from a deck of cards" ... "black and red" ... for me as a reader ... a brilliant metaphor for the inevitable ruination of it all ... you paint an oil painting with words ... "black" ... "like that hole in a branch" ... never read that image before ... poetic and precise ... "red" ... "as that colour of the stain on her lips" ... heart-breaking ... an image that engulfs in the whirlpool of what her memories must have been like ... a song of intense pain ... "she gave" ... and yet she's left all alone ... reminds me of eleanor rigby ... a classic by the beatles ... and the lines ... "all the lonely people" ... "where do they all come from" ... this verse is brilliantly felt and brilliantly written ... you carve the dimensions of solitude with simplicity and eloquence ... like a sensitive sculptor ... an immensely enriching read ...
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Thankyou.
ReplyDeleteyour words seriously makes this one a little close to beauty. you could see some shades so well.. :]
thank you, so much.
... you're very welcome! ... i hope to read more verses (poems) by you soon ... p.s. ... would appreciate it if you could email me when you post something new ... i was unable to locate the option to enable ... for following your blog ...
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